Second script idea

Scene 1

Set: Uncle Maxwell's funeral

Mum: Simon do that button  up and tuck your shirt in, at least try and look a bit presentable. It's your uncle's funeral share some respect.

Simon: (A Loud groan errupts from Simon) Leave me alone woman you have already done enough damage, by not givng me the money that was left for me in the will. I told you I wouldn't forgive you and I still haven't.

Dad: Stop talking to us like that, what happened to the little boy who didnt ever argue with us.

Simon: I don't know where you get these ideas from, I hate you I have always hated you. All the family is looking at me smugly, they know that they have all gained. Whereas I have lost everything, as you wanted the money for yourselves.

Mum: why would we want to steal money from you, when you are the one starting to set up a new home? That money wasn't rightly your's, you tricked your uncle and you know it.

Simon: you always want to think the worst of me you can never see the good in me, why is it the only person who could see any good in me is now dead. He wanted to help me, he knew I needed money and he was willing to take the chance on me.

Dad: if you don't calm your temper down, if you don't you can leave now.

Simon: (under his breath Simon mutters) why don't I leave now everyone seems to hate me anyway.

Dad: What was that Simon? (Trying to comfort his wife, while at the same time trying not to loose his temper with his son.)

The scene fades out for a couple of minutes before it cuts back into the minister speaking as the funeral begins.

Minister: we are gathered here today to celebrate the life of George Maxwell, a beloved father, a beloved son, a beloved father, and a beloved Uncle. (There are many sounds of people crying around what is presumed to be a room.)

After a thirty second pause a member of the families voice cuts in.

Family member: George manyof you know was an amazing man, from his life in the army where he recieved many medals for bravery and vala. George was an amazing man who loved his family dearly, and wanted his family to always be in the hearts of him. We will never forget him, his ending was terrible. I know if he was here he wouldnt want us to be sitting around crying, he would want us to be getting on with our lives.

Once more I asked my focus group about this idea, they didnt like this idea as well as my first one. They thought it didn't have the same tension, and many of them found it a bit boring knowing about the first idea that I had.